Writing Project.

Okay, I have another one of these writing projects and I need a little help with it. Or, at least, I would like some feedback. It is pretty long, so I apologize. I don't know that it will be worth your time, but I know that most of you like to read so... Anyway. It would be nice on my part, but don't feel obligated to read it. I just thought I'd put it out there. (It's below by the way.)